Tuesday, January 19, 2016

week#3

"Do I have to go?" I whined.
"Of course son!" dad replied "good exercise for those legs!"
I groan and in my head I think. "But this mountain is like a million kilometers!"
Then I sigh "Goody goody hurray."
Halfway up the mountain and my face is already red. Good thing I brought an umbrella with me or I would've been drenched! Suddenly I step on something hard. I realized it was some sort of mineral. But not an ordinary one. I mean it floated in the puddle. I wonder...as I take out my toy spider.
"Hey dad can I see your water bottle?"

4 comments:

  1. Clean up the ending little confused

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  2. I agree with colin and ryan the ending doesn't make sense. Make it flow better. Good use of words.

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  3. im really confused at the end why did you take out a toy spider for no reason

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